OCTPOWRIMO – POEMS – # 6 – FREEDOMIMG_20150928_151453

~Freedom’s just another word for nothing left to lose” ~ from the song “Me and Bobby McGee” sung by Janis Joplin

Today’s suggested poem was to be about Freedom and Change. Also we could try a counted syllable poem. The one I’m using is called Tanka. It is a very old type of Japanese poetry, similar to Haiku. It has the syllable count of 5-7-5-7-7, and is five lines long.


Thoughts caught in quicksand

There are blinders on my brain

I will not give up

Ideas swirl inside my head

Words find their way to freedom


I was thinking of writer’s block, but we have other obstacles put in our way, by our own selves.

Are we free to write and say what we want? For the most part, yes, as long as it’s not to the detriment of others.

Do you think we have nothing to lose by speaking our mind, meaning what we say, writing anything we want? I think we have a lot to lose, if we go around maligning others with slander, bigotry, and prejudice. We may lose respect, we may lose friends and family, we may even lose our life…all because we thought we had the complete freedom to spew our one-sided beliefs in a public way, with no give and take, or an open mind. There is always someone who will take offense.

It’s good to be brave, to take a chance, to branch out, and effect a change in yourself. But, be wary and thoughtful before speaking or writing.

We are not as free as we may think we are.

Your thoughts?


Thanks for visiting! Peace }I{

© 2015 BS

5 responses »

    • That is so true. It’s all in how you look at it, and no two people will ever see it the same. What one feels as freedom, another will feel restricted. Your poem was awesome!

  1. I really enjoyed reading your tanka and commentary! I agree that if we use our words to do harm in the ways that you mention and to be thoughtful in what words we share with the world. I also like the way that you asked for dialogue! Great job 🙂

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